An old memory . Would sure appreciate a critique before passing it on to a friend .

This post has 5 Replies | 2 Followers
Not Ranked
Posts 6
Points 75
on 3 Feb 2014 10:31 PM

  • | Post Points: 20
Top 200 Contributor
Posts 162
Points 5,185
tyneboy wrote
on 5 Feb 2014 12:21 PM

Looks pretty good to me . The only suggestion I would make , and this is just the way I do my pictures, is to try and introduce a bit more contrast by darkening the shadows. I find it gives the picture a bit more depth and makes the lighter parts seem brighter.

  • | Post Points: 35
Not Ranked
Posts 6
Points 75
on 5 Feb 2014 2:05 PM

Thank you tyneboy for your help . I appreciate the consideration and will be more contrast conscious in the future .

  • | Post Points: 5
Not Ranked
Posts 26
Points 235
on 9 Feb 2014 4:35 AM

I like the atmosphere and mood you have created. it feels tranquil and maybe a bit nostalgic? it is hard to tell if it is your photo of the work or if the left side is faded on purpose. if so, it could be because you used a photo as your source and the source photo is lacking contrast or color intensity as the other person suggested (that you add more contrast)?  overall compositon is good, I think, and the subject matter feels personal and truthful.

what technique did you use?

i ma not sure what part you want to create as the focal point...but you can play with value thumbnail sketches to see if it matches with what you see in the painting and then adjust accordingly. that is your choice and vision, so I dont think I could 'tell' you what to make darker, lighter, etc.

thanks for sharing this--it is an individual perspective and feels like you have a very personal and unique vision.

  • | Post Points: 20
Not Ranked
Posts 6
Points 75
on 9 Feb 2014 4:05 PM

Thank you so much for taking the time to do this for me . The painting is indeed nostalgic . The store , apartment building and playground were a part of my life growing up .  Your critique is appreciated . 

  • | Post Points: 20
Not Ranked
Posts 26
Points 235
on 12 Feb 2014 3:21 PM

No problem. Good luck on your next piece. I am taking my critique and going to try to work on another version of the painting I put up for feedback. It helps with another pair of eyes.

  • | Post Points: 5
Page 1 of 1 (6 items) | RSS