Oil Critique: "Jealous Much?"

21 Oct 2009
Jealous Much?
by Sheri Crawford, 2008, oil on Masonite, 16 x 20.

Bravo! This painting is strong in both concept and execution. It really does not need any “fixing.”

A good exercise in this case is to consider alternate ideas for a piece. Another possibility for this painting might be to use the shadow to design the image. If the shadow on the back wall were enlarged, it would add more drama and minimize some of the mortar lines between the bricks. Also, if the right arm of the figure in the white shirt were darkened slightly, the arm of the walking figure would come forward.

The original painting adjusted to incorporate the critic's suggestions.

About the Critic

Dawn Whitelaw has studied painting with Scott Christensen, Cedric Egeli, Jim Pollard, and Everett Raymond Kinstler. In 2002 she received the Award of Excellence and Best of Show in an international competition sponsored by the Portrait Society of America, and she has exhibited her portrait, landscape, and still life paintings in juried shows organized by the Cumberland Society of Painters, the American Academy of Women Artists, and the Phoenix Historical Museum.

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on 22 Oct 2009 8:09 AM

I adore this.  The angst of teenage years comes through loud and clear.  I would love it if this artist did another, of a woman in her office cubicle as the gorgeous executive walks by.  

Linda Smith3 wrote
on 30 Oct 2009 9:40 PM

Great critique. Those two little changes made a big difference. This is a great painting but my least favorite part is the distracting brick. The strong color works but there's too much detail. I like the red fingernail.

Sometimes we're just too involved with our own work to be objective. Occasionally even a comment from a non-artist with a good eye can

bring me to my senses.

Thank you,]

Linda Smith

Linda Smith3 wrote
on 30 Oct 2009 9:40 PM

Great critique. Those two little changes made a big difference. This is a great painting but my least favorite part is the distracting brick. The strong color works but there's too much detail. I like the red fingernail.

Sometimes we're just too involved with our own work to be objective. Occasionally even a comment from a non-artist with a good eye can

bring me to my senses.

Thank you,

Linda Smith

Margo5 wrote
on 27 Nov 2009 12:26 PM

The change to the shadow here made such a difference. Interesting what a small change like that can do.